Hour before Morning Second Cut
Nov. 11th, 2010 02:23 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
labingiLast night, Matt and I reviewed the second cut of The Hour before Morning and did some additional edits. It's looking a lot tighter now.
The highlights:
* We rescued some bits of footage that failed to make it into the rough cut: Brett as dead body, which is important because Elek does not only kill women; Ash'torian soldier being telepathicked away by Akhté; a couple of establishing shots of scenery.
* I think we've rescued the "problem" scene of Jenchae and his terrorist friend. The original cut lacked the intercut dialogue of older Jenchae and Elek and had no blank screens in place to indicate FX shots. Having repaired that, I think the scene actually makes sense and has tolerably good pacing.
* We also got blank screens in place for the ocean and sunrise footage at the end. Even with no FX, it makes the pacing and dialogue feel a lot better.
* We discussed using fades to indicate flashbacks and elapsed time. Once those transitions are in place, the sequencing of scenes should track a lot better.
We plan to meet again Monday for further revisions, and hopefully we'll have a lock soon, and I can pay our FX people lots of money (by my standards) to take it from there.
The highlights:
* We rescued some bits of footage that failed to make it into the rough cut: Brett as dead body, which is important because Elek does not only kill women; Ash'torian soldier being telepathicked away by Akhté; a couple of establishing shots of scenery.
* I think we've rescued the "problem" scene of Jenchae and his terrorist friend. The original cut lacked the intercut dialogue of older Jenchae and Elek and had no blank screens in place to indicate FX shots. Having repaired that, I think the scene actually makes sense and has tolerably good pacing.
* We also got blank screens in place for the ocean and sunrise footage at the end. Even with no FX, it makes the pacing and dialogue feel a lot better.
* We discussed using fades to indicate flashbacks and elapsed time. Once those transitions are in place, the sequencing of scenes should track a lot better.
We plan to meet again Monday for further revisions, and hopefully we'll have a lock soon, and I can pay our FX people lots of money (by my standards) to take it from there.
